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AAM 11 - making cookies by ~amyfae:iconamyfae:



The cookie-making impulse always strikes at night,
the colder and darker the better.
The scent of chocolate-chip mish-mash is irresistible,
licking off the beaters,
filling the house with cookie-warmth.

You might be sitting on the couch,
(in fact, you probably are)
reading, or watching television,
when it hits you upside the tastebuds:
semi-sweet chocolate waiting for you,
in the cabinet, behind the pots and pans,
hiding from Dad.
(Dad’s not supposed to have sweets;
if you make the cookies, you’ll have to hide them, too,
and you really ought to have made them before he got home from work.)

The thought of those tiny little chips
sets you salivating, and you pull yourself up out of the couch.
How many eggs do you have?
How much butter is there?
Did anyone bother to buy more brown sugar
after you upturned the last bag onto your oatmeal?

You quickly scan the kitchen, the cabinets,
the pantry and refrigerator;
your brain cataloguing ingredients and utensils.
This could work, you think.
Half an hour, you think, and there could be cookies.
And enough milk left to dip them in.

You’re reaching for your apron
when your eye alights upon your book,
turned over-open on the arm of the couch,
or perhaps the television is back from its relentless commercial break.
The blanket sits just so,
beckoning your cold feet
(socks never help, you notice),
and you think,
Well, I can always make cookies tomorrow.
©2008-2009 ~amyfae
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I don't even know which week we're on, but one of my assigned topics was making cookies, and that's the one I wanted to write about.

So there.

Longer than usual, and kinda fun, I thought. Comments, as always, greatly appreciated. Rotten fruit not quite so appreciated. Fresh fruit, very appreciated.
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Did anyone bother to buy more brown sugar
after you upturned the last bag onto your oatmeal?

is my favourite bit, I think because it's a really cute, clear, honest image. I have a hard time w/ food poems for some reason.
I think this wants to be short prose.

:heart:

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It was written more like short prose. And I say "the couch" too much; I just noticed. But hey, we do what we can.
I'm literally hungry, and need cookies now lol. I have always enjoyed cookies. as a young child, as a teen, and as a young adult. Cookies calm the soul and senses too, I remember having a cruddy night at work once, coming home, eating a meal, and having a nice cookie, and I was calm within minutes. Yet without the cookie, I would of been only fully from the meal and still flustured over my crazy work night. It's amazing how the the little things work with us and the big things compel us to feel this way or that. This is beautiful. Just amazing . You make us that desire cookies as a treat to make some , and you show that there is beauty behind making them :+favlove:

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Mmmm...I love cookies too. Thanks for the favorite and the comment!
I agree with ~echo-si about the best lines:

after you upturned the last bag onto your oatmeal?

I think there's probably too much poem here. I think this is a briefer thought, flitting across your brain. The part about dad is nice, but I don't know that it fits, or if it's a distraction.

The feeling of the poem is halfway between a children's story and a poem, and I think moving it one direction or the other would be good for it.

A.

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I don't really get how "you" should have made them before dad got home from work, but it's dark? So he got home, and now you're making them in the dark when he's in bed and that's a problem?

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*grins* I suppose that's a personal thing. "You" should have made the cookies before Dad got home, because then you could clean up and hide them and he'd never even know they were there...and therefore wouldn't eat them all. But now he's home, he's bound to know you're making them, and will require a tithe.
ahhhhhhhhhhh I suppose... I was thinking my dad would never wake up and I'd have more time with him sleeping to clean up than I would after school before he got home from work...

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Realize, sometimes I fall in love from a poem,
each language is its own passion
each syntax, a new religion,
and new words, a romance
I get lost in.

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