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April

Finally
the lawn
is dotted with violets
©2008-2009 ~amyfae
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Submitted: April 30, 2008
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Hooray.

25 May 2008 Edit: At the suggestion of ~epimetheus, agreed with by ~nymphatacita, I've removed the punctuation from the poem.
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I LOVE IT!

I really like the simplicity of this and I think it's beautiful. I think it's excellent poetry. It's a beautiful and poetic thought that really strikes home in such a simple and efficient way. Well done! I think the only thing that I'd change is to remove the punctuation, because really, it isn't necessary at all and distracted me from the simplicity of it all. But still, wonderful!

a.

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i agree with epimetheus.
*grins* Thanks! I'm pretty pleased with it myself. It sums up my feelings about April this year entirely. I'll consider your suggestion about punctuation - does that include the period at the end, or just the comma after "finally"?

And thanks for the favorite on it. *grins again* It feels good to produce something that is beautiful and simple and I am just plain old happy with. I don't usually manage haiku (or any short short poetry) well, but every once in a while I surprise myself.
Thanks!! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Do you also agree about the punctuation (getting rid of it, that is)?
That includes the period and the comma. They both seem redundant.

A.

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othe beau
tiful, beau
tiful
truth.

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Sometimes I've believed as many as six impossible things before breakfast.
Thank you. *smile* Simple seems best, with truth.
Simple and beautiful and magic

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