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I met Amy January once

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April 4, 2003
I found this deviant, one amyfae, and discovered nothing but wordflow as yet refreshing to see- and something more. Rhythm. Come and read I met Amy January once and see if you agree… Picked by ^keen.
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I met Amy January once

and she didn’t damnable glitter at me one time
she no more fit my universe explained
my cosmos caught my eye not like some
come-out-of-80’s cartoon pop culture character
no wings no halo no legendary aura on her
just barely clean just barely talking and no
soul-reader deep conversation but more
vacant looks children’s books and not one
single smile did she crack or creep
no faerie-Indian-princess heritage here not one bit
she kept her hair back her clothes on her feet
secured to the ground without glowing
glimmering shimmering she wouldn’t
look me in the eye catch me off my guard
embrace me on good-bye she’s got no goddess
blood in those veins not her when I met her
I knew she was just like me
This is my self portrait, I guess you could say. It was written in response to a friend, I guess. Sort of. Whatever.

It's a little cliche in some places.

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ubetyourboots
I thought I already commented on this before, but....

I'll do it now.

I like it a lot. The words AND the flow both have a nice unique funk to them (funk as in groove, not as in 'this fucking stinks').

And...I don't see one goddamn bit of cliche in it, so I have NO CLUE what vox is talking about.

A great poem, indeed--this deserves the DD status that it has received. Congrats.

Ube.